Wednesday, January 14, 2009

Three Word Wednesday~Flash Fiction

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Things Aren't Always What They Seem

So entwined they resembled some mutant crab, the two young men scuttled across the mat, each doing his part to create the vision of wrestling, and not allow anyone to grasp the slight physical nuances that made it the lover’s tryst it had become over the years. Touching, grunting, hands sliding over each other in a sweeping caress, bodies pressed together..... if anyone ever caught on, they would have to forfeit all that they knew of life as it was. Instead, they took turns winning matches against the other, maintaining a rivalry, while whispering code phrases of devotion under harsh exhalations of breath whenever they were locked face to face in the duel. Homeward with friends, each back with their respective fans who cat-called cheers and jeers out of car windows to the opposing team, the quiet bubble they sat in was put down to a loss or exhaustion--never to the rending of heart created when you leave your loved one.

9 comments:

Anonymous said...

Wonderful!

Love "mutant crab..."

Thom Gabrukiewicz said...

Very nicely done, Q. My more graphic comments will be forward to you in an email. Hope you're well, or as good as you can be irradiated.

rebecca said...

Wow! Excellent...

Anonymous said...

What a brilliant idea, brilliantly laid out and pulled off with amazing skill. Reminds me of the first thing I ever read of yours, your SS piece 1935. You’ve got it going on whether you’re glowing or not : )

Peter Varvel said...

Exquisite, this!
And erotic, homie.

Anonymous said...

I love the image of them scuttling across the mat like mutant crabs and the quiet bubble they sat in at the end.

Anonymous said...

I love the way you put so much into so few words. Prose with the economy of poetry.

Anonymous said...

a friend of mine is a coach for wrestling and of course, being a friend who supports i'm there... now i will forever imagine lovers at play unrecognized in a crowd... cannot help but to think of brokeback mt... beautiful

quin browne said...

thank you for the comments, all... i reworked this and sent it to 6s.

i've answered thom's questions in an email... you can ask HIM what he asked me.


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