Sunday, December 28, 2008

Sunday Scribblings~Flash Fiction

Today, the prompt word over at SundayScribblings was 'believe'.

I wrote the following piece aeons ago, reflecting back on my divorce, tucking it away... and, since it had the word 'believe' in it, I dug it out to use...


Word Play

"Believe for once." you said, in hushed tones, your hand in my hair, twisting the curls on your finger. "Believe in us." your mouth moving over mine, soft whispers as your lips slid to my jaw and down my throat. "Please, believe in me, in what I tell you, trust in this future I swear will happen." Murmured phrases, your face between my breasts, our bodies still wrapped around each other, skin touching, as we breathed in counter-point. "Believe when I tell you I cannot imagine life without you, that the last thing I want on this earth is to be held in your arms, to hear your heart beat, to have your scent surround me." "Believe." you asked, and I answered with blind faith until she called to brag of your betrayal, destroying all--giving proof to not trust anyone who uses that particular phrase, that word. The truth lies at the core--beLIEve.

18 comments:

floreta said...

i can relate to this. all those promised nothings that fall short.. way too short. people who say such things and put expectations on a burgeoning relationship... i say are red flags.

Annamari said...

eros the bitersweet...and the ones that think it's ok just because you get what you want.

Linda Jacobs said...

There is such pain in this piece! I hope writing about it helped you through that difficult time.

Devil Mood said...

It fits perfectly. It's a pity that you had to go through that, though. But you've portrayed it amazingly well there.

SweetTalkingGuy said...

Phew, didn't notice that till you 'spelled' it out. Who would have thought there was a lie in believe?

harrietv said...

Long ago, in a land far away, that was how they taught us to spell that word. I've had trouble believing ever since I told the truth to people who don't/didn't believe me.

Alone on the Isle said...

Sometimes your pieces break my heart.... I wish I could make all the pain go away.

Hopefully the new years has great things in store for you.

Hope all is well with you.

Bud said...

I really hate that you were hurt that way

Valley Girl said...

Beautifully written!

austere said...

Well. Good for a sub. At least. Like most costly hurts are.

Beautiful Witch said...

I'm enjoying the darker side of this prompt. How interesting to see the lie in belief...of course if it's a happy lie, I guess that's okay.

Cormac Brown said...

I guess you really can't spell "believe" without "l-i-e." That would've been wonderful, if it wasn't so depressing.

It's still a good piece.


I think I need a drink or something.

golfwidow said...

I have petitioned the dictionaries to change the spelling of "gullible" to "gullieble" but no one cares. This is why we can't trust anyone.

raino said...

a whole lotta hurt in that one there.

gautami tripathy said...

It touched me..

guts wrench out.....


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linda may said...

Lying B***d. When I hear stories like that I think "He wasn't worthy of you was he.

gel said...

Many can relate to undying love turning to daggers. Your work slices through me. Very well-written. I like word play (as you'll see in my piece.).

Patois said...

I'm so sorry that I see the LIE in that word now. Nicely written.